Lovely. It suggests maybe artificial rain, or else some kind of sinister black hovering thing -- I like the ambiguity.
Yeah, that's what I saw: a huge spacecraft hovering over a dry desert with no one left on earth.I like the ambiguity!
You have described Delhi! All storm, the dusty kind, no rains!BTW, post it to One Single Impression. Desrt is their current prompt. Take the link from my blog!Now read my RWP post:clawing crawlies
I like the ambiguity in this!
Helicopter? Love Haiku's.
metal rain that bears no blessings...
Promises unfulfilled???Thanks for ready my poem and for your comments!Christina
Very cool haiku. Definitely ambiguous -- you can assign the dark, metal cloud to signify almost anything. The poem actually makes me think of both the Iraq war as well as something more personal, like a situation one longs to improve or that doesn't have any momentum.
ok you are absolutely making me think looking for the metaphor in this haiku, thanks for the challenge...seriously!!! LOLenjoy your weekend!
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