Monday, May 5, 2008


In response to the sci-fi prompt at readwritepoem

A dark, metal cloud
hovers over desert land.
Still, no rain comes forth.

I have different ideas of what this means. How do you interpret it?


rbarenblat said...

Lovely. It suggests maybe artificial rain, or else some kind of sinister black hovering thing -- I like the ambiguity.

Linda said...

Yeah, that's what I saw: a huge spacecraft hovering over a dry desert with no one left on earth.

I like the ambiguity!

gautami tripathy said...

You have described Delhi! All storm, the dusty kind, no rains!

BTW, post it to One Single Impression. Desrt is their current prompt. Take the link from my blog!

Now read my RWP post:

clawing crawlies

Crafty Green Poet said...

I like the ambiguity in this!

Cathy ~ Tadpoles and Teacups said...

Helicopter? Love Haiku's.

one more believer said...

metal rain that bears no blessings...

TOCCO said...

Promises unfulfilled???

Thanks for ready my poem and for your comments!


Boriqua said...

Very cool haiku. Definitely ambiguous -- you can assign the dark, metal cloud to signify almost anything. The poem actually makes me think of both the Iraq war as well as something more personal, like a situation one longs to improve or that doesn't have any momentum.

mermaid musings said...

ok you are absolutely making me think looking for the metaphor in this haiku, thanks for the challenge...seriously!!!
enjoy your weekend!